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Children should be forced to read novels from every major genre including science fiction, sport, romance, horror and crime. Being widely read will mean children will have a better understanding of the world around them. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A child is like clay, a parent and teachers can
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 them in whichever
way
 they want. The
world
 of a child revolves around school, home and playground which makes them see the
world
 the
way
 they want it to be. Intellectual knowledge is necessary for
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possible growth and a better understanding of the universe. Nowadays with the widespread use of
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 a juvenile's brain only focuses on visual content and images
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world
 to be seen the
way
 it is not. A good
way
 to make them brainstorm is by introducing novels in their lives which would make them learn the
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 and about of their surroundings. Families can sit together and discuss possible conclusions regarding each book so that the child doesn't go
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a
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 wrong direction. Adding on to that, novels should not be implied on them rather they should be given choices so that a kid can get to know what would interest them the most whether it will be something related to science, romance, crime or sports. Diving into the books will
also
 help them to increase their vocabulary and they will possibly
also
 develop their interest in a particular field.   All learning cannot be done in
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 one should be given an opportunity to explore the outside
world
 at an early age for their own development. A narrative hides a lot of information in different forms one just needs to open
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 start reading to excel in their life.
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