The Table Below Shows the Numbers of Visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The Table Below Shows the Numbers of Visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams illustrate how many
people
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visited Ashdown Museum before and after its replenishment and
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the satisfaction level of these
people
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. Looking from an
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perspective, it is readily apparent that the renovation of the museum caused an increase in guest numbers.
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, more
people
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liked their experience in
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museum compared to the year before the renovation. In the table, it is observed that one year before the restoration, 74,000 individuals came to see the art in the place. In the next year, after the place has been restored, the number rose by 18,000 to reach 92,000.
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the pie charts, 15% of the visitors were contented about their visit previous to the reconstruction and the proportion climbed substantially, reaching 35% back of the renovation. Previously, the largest proportion was represented by dissatisfied guests which
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40%,
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it belonged to the satisfied population
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. (40%). Sooner, the very dissatisfied community accounted for 10% of the visitors, later they accounted for only 5% of all guests. The share of satisfied
people
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went up from 30% to 40% during the reconstruction and that of very dissatisfied persons declined from 10% to 5%. The contribution of society that didn’t respond was the same in both times.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor numbers
  • satisfaction levels
  • very satisfied
  • satisfied
  • neither satisfied nor dissatisfied
  • dissatisfied
  • very dissatisfied
  • survey results
  • comparison
  • impact
  • effectiveness
  • visitor experience
  • overall improvement
  • increase/decrease in visitors
  • positive feedback
  • negative feedback
  • visitor survey
  • survey period
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