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Government should spend more on railways than roads. Do you agree or disagree with the statement.?

#government #railways #roads
In
todays
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 world, roads and
railways
 play a crucial role in everyone's life. The spending on
railways
 should be more as
compare
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compared
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 to roads by the government. I
am completely agree
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completely agree
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 with
this
 statement. I will discuss my points in the upcoming paragraphs to support my opinion.
Firstly
,
rails
 are the most convenient means of
transportation
. Nowadays, every city has
railways
 for
transportation
. There are few big cities which
does
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do
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 have underground built
railways
. On
rails
, it is easy to carry more luggage because there is no restriction
of
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on
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 taking extra bags.
Moreover
,
people
 can
do
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rest as the seats are very big
in
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on
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 the trains as
compare
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compared
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 to private means of
transportation
.
Secondly
,
rails
 are the fastest way of travelling. There are
less
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fewer
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 stops and no traffic on
railways
 so
that
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people
 have to wait.
Nevertheless
,
import
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imports
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 and export are done on
rails
 which helps to increase the economy of the country.
For example
, small businesses cannot afford big travelling expenses but on
rails
, they can easily send and receive things.
This
 helps the small businessman to make
profit
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a profit
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.
Thirdly
,
railways
 are the cheapest way of
transportation
 and travelling.
People
 can get their family tickets
with in
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within
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 very less amount for
wondering
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wandering
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to
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apply
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long distances. There are no extra charges for taking food in it. In conclusion, no doubt, roads play an important part in
people
's
life
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lives
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 but
railrwsys
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railways
 are more appropriate for travelling as
rails
 are the fastest and
more
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most
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 suitable means of
transportation
.
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