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Some people think that real life skills like cooking, housekeeping and gardening should be included in the curriculum as compulsory subjects? Do you agree or disagree? Explain your opinion, using specific reasons and details.

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There is no denying the fact that the impact of studying is arguable.
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 it is a commonly held belief that several masses argue that
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 should add
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skills
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 in their modules. From my perspective, I strongly believe that
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skills
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 must be learned in
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school.
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this
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. On the one hand, involving
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skills
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 classes in the syllabus can give juveniles an experience that may need in the future.
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, several youngsters may leave their
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 house when they start their university degree,
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 might benefit them when they live alone.
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, the individual might become dependable when he learns
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skills
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,
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 makes it clear that including
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skills
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 in the educational program could help the pupils in
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 future.
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, having
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skills
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 in the youth curriculum can be
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. To illustrate, if the youngsters learned
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skills
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as washing their clothes, they will not need to wash their clothes outside the home
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laundry
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, teenagers will own the
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 to do
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 by themself without the need of bringing someone and buys for
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 to perform
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 jobs.
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, educating
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teens to perform
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skills
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 can bring
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massive benefits
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 their
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. In conclusion. in my opinion, I strongly believe that
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children must learn
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skills
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 in
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 syllabus as including
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 can ease their
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 and save
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 money in the future.
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