Success is often measured by wealth and material possessions. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

In a materialistic world, nowadays it is becoming increasingly common that
people
can see
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success
only with property and treasures,
such
as cars, yachts, bank accounts or expensive
jewelleries
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.
Although
I accept the inconsiderable role of these
things
on
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success
I believe that a person can be successful without these
things
as well. With regarding the opinion of
success
, one of the main reasons why most
people
think that
success
can only be measured by richness or material possessions is that many famous
people
,
who
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almost everyone respects and wants to become like them, have
such
things
and they always show
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with their luxury lives and it influences to
people
’s thoughts about
success
.
For example
, we can see on social
medias
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that Ilon Mask who is considered to be
successful
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person is always seen with his wealth and luxuries.
Furthermore
, many
people
who are not in good condition, cannot afford these sorts of
things
and they feel
themselves
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like
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unsuccessful
,
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so
that
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they automatically connect the accomplishment with prosperity and material belongings. From my point of view, to be successful in
life
it
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is not enough
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wealthy and well-conditioned. Since it is proven by
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the majority
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of sciences that being grateful and convent with what we have is
best
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way to feel
happiness
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and it will help everyone without any difficulties.
Furthermore
, another important
indicate
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of achievement is to have
wealthy
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relationship in
life
for each
individuals
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.
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, it is hard to imagine that someone who has
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lonely soul can achieve something great.
To sum up
, I cannot ignore that property and material belongings play
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a role
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role
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for
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happiness, I believe that
people
can achieve
their
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happy
life
being
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satisfied and confident in their
life
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Affluence
  • Materialism
  • Fulfillment
  • Well-being
  • Philanthropy
  • Societal norms
  • Personal growth
  • Economic power
  • Subjective
  • Humanitarian
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