Shops should not be allowed to sell any food or drinks that have been scientifically proven to be bad for people's health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Recently, the issue
has
been brought Correct pronoun usage
that has
some
into focus is Correct quantifier usage
apply
food
and drink which is contain
numerous sugar or preservative substance Change the verb form
contain
have
a large number of disadvantages for our Correct pronoun usage
that have
heath
. Some Correct your spelling
health
people
believe that fast food
is a significant feature of modern life. In my opinion, shops should not be permitted to sell food
that harmful to people
’s health
. In this
essay, I will outline the specific drawback of harmful food
.
One thing that is
of great significant
is that unhealthy Replace the word
significance
food
and drink must not be empowered to sell anymore. There are many reasons for the bad effect of sophisticated ready-prepared microwavable meals due to
the substances harmful to health
. For one thing, people
want to keep food
to
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apply
last
a long time, so nowadays manufacturers often add chemicals to keep them last
longer. For another, if you use these products for a long time, you will easily encounter health
diseases such
as digestive problems, heart attack
, or even cancer. It may give rise to a number Fix the agreement mistake
attacks
of
the growth of obesity and diabetes. The most familiar example of Change preposition
apply
this
is that in Viet Nam, young people
have to study and work in a
overdone wayChange the article
an
,
so that the Remove the comma
apply
last
option they have is eating fast food
, which have
Change the verb form
has
large
amount of fat and it can lead to obesity these days. Change the article
a large
On the other hand
, the entitled to sell the
convenience products will be very difficult to achieve Correct article usage
apply
due to
the great demand from customers. It seems quite clear that people
should gradually give up the habit of eating fast food
and convenience food
.
It
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isIt
wasIt
also
well-known that eating unhealthy food
will reduce our quality of life. Government is also
responsible for not to permitted to sell all the comsumption
of utility convenience Correct your spelling
consumption
food
. The immediate result it produces is government should warn the people
about the disadvantages that it will cause to their health
. A better example of this
can be best provide
by in Change the form of the verb
provided
Australia
government was organized many campaign Correct your spelling
Australian
talk
about the numerous drawback of Fix the infinitive
to talk
food
which is bad for people’
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people’s
health
and also
raise
awareness of Change the verb form
raises
people
. It make
no difference that governments and citizens should join a hand to abandon practices Change the verb form
makes
all
the Change preposition
of all
harmfull
product in order to be as fit as a fiddle and stay in shape.
In summary, it is important that shops must Correct your spelling
harmful
to
stop providing meals and drinks that impact Change the verb form
apply
people
's health
in a
awful way, and in order to improve your own Change the article
an
health
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Word Count
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