Shops should not be allowed to sell any food or drinks that have been scientifically proven to be bad for people's health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Recently, the issue
has
been brought Correct pronoun usage
that has
some
into focus is Correct quantifier usage
apply
food
and drink which Use synonyms
is contain
numerous sugar or preservative substance Change the verb form
contain
have
a large number of disadvantages for our Correct pronoun usage
that have
heath
. Some Correct your spelling
health
people
believe that fast Use synonyms
food
is a significant feature of modern life. In my opinion, shops should not be permitted to sell Use synonyms
food
that harmful to Use synonyms
people
’s Use synonyms
health
. In Use synonyms
this
essay, I will outline the specific drawback of harmful Linking Words
food
.
One thing Use synonyms
that is
of great Linking Words
significant
is that unhealthy Replace the word
significance
food
and drink must not be empowered to sell anymore. There are many reasons for the bad effect of sophisticated ready-prepared microwavable meals Use synonyms
due to
the substances harmful to Linking Words
health
. For one thing, Use synonyms
people
want to keep Use synonyms
food
Use synonyms
to
Fix the infinitive
apply
last
a long time, so nowadays manufacturers often add chemicals to keep them Linking Words
last
longer. For another, if you use these products for a long time, you will easily encounter Linking Words
health
diseases Use synonyms
such
as digestive problems, heart Linking Words
attack
, or even cancer. It may give rise to a number Fix the agreement mistake
attacks
of
the growth of obesity and diabetes. The most familiar example of Change preposition
apply
this
is that in Viet Nam, young Linking Words
people
have to study and work in Use synonyms
a
overdone wayChange the article
an
,
so that the Remove the comma
apply
last
option they have is eating fast Linking Words
food
, which Use synonyms
have
Change the verb form
has
large
amount of fat and it can lead to obesity these days. Change the article
a large
On the other hand
, the entitled to sell Linking Words
the
convenience products will be very difficult to achieve Correct article usage
apply
due to
the great demand from customers. It seems quite clear that Linking Words
people
should gradually give up the habit of eating fast Use synonyms
food
and convenience Use synonyms
food
.
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It
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isIt
wasIt
also
well-known that eating unhealthy Linking Words
food
will reduce our quality of life. Government is Use synonyms
also
responsible for not to permitted to sell all the Linking Words
comsumption
of utility convenience Correct your spelling
consumption
food
. The immediate result it produces is government should warn the Use synonyms
people
about the disadvantages that it will cause to their Use synonyms
health
. A better example of Use synonyms
this
can be best Linking Words
provide
by in Change the form of the verb
provided
Australia
government was organized many campaign Correct your spelling
Australian
talk
about the numerous drawback of Fix the infinitive
to talk
food
which is bad for Use synonyms
Use synonyms
people’
Correct your spelling
people’s
health
and Use synonyms
also
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raise
awareness of Change the verb form
raises
people
. It Use synonyms
make
no difference that governments and citizens should join a hand to abandon practices Change the verb form
makes
all
the Change preposition
of all
harmfull
product in order to be as fit as a fiddle and stay in shape.
In summary, it is important that shops must Correct your spelling
harmful
to
stop providing meals and drinks that impact Change the verb form
apply
people
's Use synonyms
health
in Use synonyms
a
awful way, and in order to improve your own Change the article
an
health
.Use synonyms
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