It has recently been announced that a new high school may be built in your community. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details in your answer.

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The phenomenon of constructing a new high
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in our region has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as people's views on
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issue in question may be, I disagree that developing
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networks in our society. Of all the reasons why the new high
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should not be built, probably the most significant one is that
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school
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can only make a little profit for our community. To illustrate,
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is not a special building and it can only attract
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people who come to our community
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as the students and their parents.
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, they will be the
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potential
customer of our society.
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, if the plan is going to build a shopping centre, more types of customers from different ages and fields are predicted.
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will in turn increase our community income. Another reason that should not be overlooked is that new high schools may not
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to survive in the current market. The most noticeable reason is the production rate declined dramatically in recent years.
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, many schools already announce that they are not enough students to continue running.
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the
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argument, as a
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established high
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, it
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to compete with prestigious schools in order to admit enough students. Under
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line of thinking, it seems to me that
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building
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is the worse development plan base on the low profit and hard to operate.
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, we should find another investment to develop our society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational opportunities
  • extracurricular activities
  • community hub
  • stimulate the local economy
  • property values
  • quality of life
  • resource allocation
  • construction and operation
  • economic benefits
  • community development
  • traffic and congestion
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