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some people believe that capital punishment should not be used. Others, however, argue that it should be allowed for the most serious crimes. Discuss both views and give your opinion ielts essay

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The capital
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punishment
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 had been for
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long time the most popular way of
punishment
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 in
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most part of the world
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 before it was abolished in the past century. Nowadays it has a bad reputation among democratic countries and is considered a brutal way of
punishment
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 and is
percepted
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perceived
 as a threat of
totalitarism
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totalitarianism
totalitarian
.
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, a lot of
people
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 in the present are for
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 method. Taking the part of
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most countries and of
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human rights,
this
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 way of
punishment
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 must be interdicted because it is, in the first place, illegal.
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, is a radical method of extermination of
people
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 who broke the law, that
doesm't
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doesn't
 have any chance to be corrected in the future and, in consequence, an unfairly
condamned
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condemned
 person might be killed. Taking
in
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 consideration that today existest a huge variety of forms of
punishment
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, like fees or
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life detention,
that
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such
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 a grave breach of human rights has to be forbidden.
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, taking
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the
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account all the criminals that
were
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commited
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committed
 a number of
murderes
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murderers
murders
 or sexual
agressions
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aggressions
aggression
 one by one and the detention couldn't
avoit
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avoid
 it, these sort of criminals has to be free of rights and killed. Society has to understand that it is not just a
menthal
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mental
mentally
 ill person that
unconciously
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unconsciously
 murdered a certain number of
people
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 in the past, but it is a perilous
meber
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member
 of society
that is
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 capable to repeat its crime over again. In my personal opinion,
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capital
punishment
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 has to remain
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 service as the
last
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 choice in case of extremely grave
murderes
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murderers
murderer
 or
viols
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vols
.
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, it has to be strictly
controled
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controlled
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international organizations
such
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UN
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the UN
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 or the
Soupreme
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Supreme
 Court of Justice at Haga, but not used like in Belarus or Russia for political
oponents
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opponents
. These being said, these two
oppinions
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opinions
 have their strong points, as the
punishent
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punishment
bu
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by
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 death has its risks and a history of terror
behind
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, but it
also
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 may be a secure solution to eliminate some
people
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 who represent a real danger
for
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 the community's wellbeing.
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