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Car ownersgip has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now one big traffic jam What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Nowadays, the tendency of purchasing private vehicles
such
 as
cars
 has risen dramatically in the 3 decades , especially in the 10 years and it is a reason why some of the big cities on the Earth become “one big traffic jam”.I totally agree with that statement. Because my own city where I was born and grew up has become
such
 a bunch of
cars
.In my ,judgment it is a mistake of the
government
 that gives chance to the problems like that, though I believe that there are a number of ways that
government
 could fix the situation. First of all, of course, when you are solving
such
 a problem, you need to pay attention to other types of movement. So I mean that we need to develop public
transport
 systems first.
This
 signifies: decreasing in ticket costs for public
transport
 and increasing in the number of that type of vehicle.
Also
, it would be great, if the
government
, in general, will make the road by public
transport
 more convenient and comfortable.In
this
 case, it will be easier for citizens to travel by bus or subway and so in the end they will use the car less.
Secondly
, a really useful help from the
government
 is an increase in bicycle areas with more cycle zones and opportunities to have a bike.
In addition
,
this
 eco-friendly method is relevant, because as we know, exhaust gases from
cars
 cause huge damage to our environment. And
last
 but not least, the
government
 could limit the car park’s time and impose high taxes on fuel, so that prevents
people
 from using
cars
 and would motivate
people
 to go by bus, tram, train or by walking. In conclusion, development is the reason for owning more and more
cars
, but
people
 are the
people
 who will suffer the most. Because of
this
, it follows that the
government
 and we should gradually refuse
cars
 and use more public
transport
.
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