The chart below shows the different types of goods and services purchased online in Australia, Canada and the United Kingdom in one year. Summaries the the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the different types of goods and services purchased online in Australia, Canada and the United Kingdom in one year. Summaries the the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart below provides data about the
percentage
of seven categories of goods and
services
purchased online for three countries in a one-year period. As the bar chart shows, the United Kingdom occupy the leading position in five of seven items, which classifies in the first place, followed by
Canada
and
Australia
. In terms of toys purchased,
Australia
has the lowest
percentage
, which is near zero,
while
Canada
has the highest rate of 30%. In food, drink and financial
services
Australia
maintains a stable position
while
the
percentage
in
Canada
is about 0% on food and drinks
as well as
the UK in financial
services
. In the next two
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the rating doesn't change, the second place is occupied by
Australia
and the third one by
Canada
while
the UK reached a high in music, counting almost 70% of customers. In computer equipment and books,
Canada
and
Australia
remained in the same positions with a contribution of over 40%, the contribution of the United Kingdom varying from 50%in the first case and over 60% in the second one.
To sum up
, the
percentage
is distributed unequally among items and countries, varying a lot in some categories.
Therefore
, the smallest
percentage
receive Toys,Food and Financial
services
,
while
music, computer equipment and books have the highest rate of customers.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, services, canada, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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