The graph below shows the population figures for different type of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012.

The graph below shows the population figures for different type of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012.
The provided chart depicts the indicators of
turtles
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population
between 4 different types in India over 32 years period from 1980 to 2012.
Overall
, the
population
of Olive Ridley
turtles
saw
an
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enormous growth,
whereas
the
population
of Leatherback
turtles
decreased significantly. Green
turtles
and all species saw a modest decline and incline respectively.
Population
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The population
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of all types was about 100 in 1980 and in the following
1982
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each
population
went up on average of 5. Before jumping to just above 110 in 1987
population
of leatherback
turtles
fell to 100 in 1983. Continuing fall with some fluctuations the
population
of Leatherback
turtles
was lowest compared to other populations and represented just under 60 in 2012.
In addition
, the
population
of green
turtles
also
fell over the period with big fluctuations and accounted for approximately 90
at the end
of the loop.
By contrast
, the
population
of Olive Ridley
Turtles
reached its peak at almost 140 surpassing all other populations and was around 130 in the year 2012. Before 2002 the
population
of all other species fluctuated and was about 100
this
year.
Then
continuing gradually increasing it accounted for almost 110
at the end
of the span.
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