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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates the amount of
utilization
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 of different sources of
energy
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 in
quadrillion
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units
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 in America since 1980 with the future prediction of
energy
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 usage by 2030. To commence with, petrol and oil usage was 35
quadrillion
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units
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 in 1980 which showed fluctuation until 1995 between 35 to 30
quadrillion
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units
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 before steadily increasing to 40
quadrillion
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units
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 by 2005. The future prediction for petrol and oil
utilization
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 is a slow increase to about 42
quadrillion
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units
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 by 2020 followed by a sharp increase to 45
quadrillion
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units
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 by 2025 which will remain stable for the next few years before jumping up to 50
quadrillion
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units
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 by 2030. In 1980, natural
gas
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 was the second major source of
energy
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 at 20
quadrillion
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units
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 which dropped down to approximately 17
quadrillion
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units
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 by 1985 and with a fluctuation trend predicted to increase to 25
quadrillion
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units
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 by 2015 which will remain stable until 2030.
On the other hand
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, coal whose
utilization
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 was lower than natural
gas
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 in 1980 i.e., about 4
quadrillion
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units
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 difference, with an overlapping trend with natural
gas
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 will surpass the latter by 2015 expected to hit around 30
quadrillion
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units
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 by 2030. The
utilization
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 of nuclear, solar
wind
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,
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 and
hydropower
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 were all at nearly 3
quadrillion
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units
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 in 1980 but nuclear
energy
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utilization
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 increased to about 7 quadrillions after fluctuation which was predicted to remain there by 2030. The solar
wind
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 was the second
last
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 source of
energy
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 with
utilization
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 predicted to remain somehow stable at 5
quadrillion
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units
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 by 2030 after showing some downward trend in 1995 where
hydropower
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utilization
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 remained a little over solar
wind
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energy
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. The
energy
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 of
hydropower
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 is predicted to be the least consumed
energy
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 by 2030 i.e., about 3
quadrillion
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units
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.
To sum up
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, petrol and oil are the major sources of
energy
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 since 1980 with the future prediction of increased usage by 2030 followed by coal and natural
gas
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. The
utilization
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 of nuclear, solar
wind
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,
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 and
hydropower
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 is the least among all
energy
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 sources predicted to remain at the lowest consumption by 2030.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words utilization, energy, quadrillion, units, gas, wind, hydropower with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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