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Percentage change in number of households made homeless due to selected immediate causes, 2008/9-2013/14-indexed

The following line graph illustrates the rates in the number of house households made homeless with  the reasons behind
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 change from 2008 to 2014.
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, it can be clearly seen that starting from 2008 until 2009 all the causes had the same percentage. It is noticeable that the rates of the end of the private tenancy have had a substantial increase since 20010/11 and continued to 2013/14 after the drop in 2009/10.
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, relationship breakdown did not have a huge difference through the years in the graph as it almost remain stable. At the beginning of the given ,period both parental exclusion and mortgage repossession had a dramatic decrease in the rates to 70
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 for the first cause and nearly 50 for the second.
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, they had a slight rise up to 80% and 72% between 2011 and 2012 before they fell again to 45% and 68%in the next few years .

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