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Technology has changed the way people communicatr today. Some people belive this is making our relationship stronger while others believe it is harming them. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

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It is often argued that electronic devices are making
people
 less touchy than in the past,
however
, some
people
 use these devices to contact their friends and families. I believe relations are getting powerful thanks to the internet.
This
 essay will analyse how social media have transformed the connection between
people
 on both bright and dark sides. It has been suggested that the internet has made strong relationships between
people
 because it assists them to talk easily.
For example
, friends used to not see each other in summer vacations,regardless,
Snapchat
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 they could face time and, call each other.
Moreover
, phones have increased marriage opportunities because many
people
 have made relationships and, ended up in marriage.
For example
, men can communicate with women,
consequently
, they can know each other and, falling love. In the vast majority of ,cases technology is making relationships weaker because a lot of
people
 have been occupied by watching social media.
For example
, my friend was really close to me
nevertheless
, she is becoming not my friend any more because she never asked about me
as a result
 of being busy on Instagram. In conclusion, I believe technology has made relations between
people
 weaker than in the past because humans are becoming addicted to social media.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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