The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The charts give information about the proportion of electricity generation from all types including renewables in
France
and
Germany
in 2009.
Overall
, it is manifest from the charts that Conventional Thermal energy who accounted for 59.6% was the most significant source in
Germany
whereas
France
relied mostly on Nuclear which was about three quarters.
By contrast
, with respect to renewable energy, it contributed relatively low both in
Germany
and
France
. More specifically, the electricity generation of renewable power in
France
represented less than 15%, with conventional thermal coming next (10.8%).
Similarly
, the percentage of renewable uses in
Germany
was slightly higher, which was 17.4%.
Furthermore
, in terms of the exact uses of renewables,
Germany
was inclined to use
Biomas
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Biomass
and Wind more, with both exceeding one-third.
Likewise
, Solar and Hydroelectric comprised low respectively.
However
, Hydroelectric ranked first in
France
, with 80.5%
while
only 10.5% of wind, 8.1% of
Biomas
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Biomass
and 0.9% of Solar were used. Comparing the four charts,
it is clear that
Nuclear Power and Hydroelectric in Renewables in
France
accounted for the absolute highest percentage of electric generation
whereas
Germany
relied more on the rest of
energies
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in 2009.
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