Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam’. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

Nowadays, in all of the cities in the world the amount of driving
cars
on the road
are
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numerous
that
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is the most reliable proof
about
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the quantity of ownership.
Although
the number of traffic jams
aren’t appeared
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don’t appear
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too much because
the
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enthusiasm of the police and the traffic
contructions
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constructions
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, I completely agree with the statement. It is an undeniable fact that owning a
car
or
cars
is the best solution to prove the sociable effect on the community and to solve the transportation demand problems.
Firstly
, unlike the rural place where the
apperance
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appearance
of
the
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car
is uncommon, in the metropolis where the standard of living is
incrediblely
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incredibly
high, having a high-class
car
is
the
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symbol of rich,
because
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and because
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of that the
wealhiest
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wealthiest
people
usually spend
the
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amount of money which may be equal to the asset of some
people
for buying a
car
to show their power and reputation. To elaborate, many celebrities own a luxury
car
and constantly drive it to their
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or celebrations, just by doing that, many
paparazzies
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paparazzi
will capture them with their “horse”, so their popularity will increase.
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not only the popular
people
but
also
the metropolis citizens
also
want to have a
car
because the
car
is the most effective vehicle on the ground. By going deeper, we can know that the distance the
cars
can go
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refuel is higher than other vehicles,
also
because the
cars
are spacious so it will afford the seat problems.
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,
the
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cars
will be able for citizen
people
who have long distances trips frequently just like visiting their family or their occasions. To reduce the number of
cars
on the road,
goverments
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governments
have a
plenthora
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plethora
of ways to make it.
Goverments
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Governments
can make some rules about parking
place
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places
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which
also
cause
the
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problem or organise some events to motivate the
citizents
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citizens
to use their feet.
For example
, the
authoroties
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authorities
can mark the place for
people
to park their
car
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, by doing that, the road will be wider
also
they can open
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a “walkin
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walkin
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walk-in
walking
walk in
road” on some specific
street
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streets
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to decrease the number of
trafficf
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traffic
jams
although
it can be
unplesent
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unpleasant
to some
people
. In the conclusion, at the present, we haven’t
have
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any
methords
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methods
method
to solve the situation. In my opinion,
the
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traffic jam is one of the
most
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largest civil unrest and
this
problem need to be fixed as soon as possible.
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