The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
When linear graph
illustrate
the Change the verb form
illustrates
usage
of different kind of energy sources in USA
from 1980 to 2030.
Correct article usage
the USA
In
Change preposition
Overall
overall
,all most all the power
sources will have been
increased in 2030 except Unnecessary verb
apply
hydropower
usage
of Petroleum fuel will be the stayed as the highest consuming energy method from the beginning to the end of predicted
period and Add an article
the predicted
lowest
one will be Correct article usage
the lowest
hydropower
.
Consumption of petroleum and oil was 35 quadrillion
units
in 1980 and will have an upword
trend until the end of the predicted time (more than 45 Correct your spelling
upward
quadrillion
units
) Coal also
will have been showed
Change the verb form
showing
shown
the
more or less similar increment with several fluctuations Correct article usage
a
while
natural gas was slightly climbed by five quadrillion
units
between 1980 to 2015 and will have a plateau until 2030.
Furthermore
, usage
of all three power
sources named as
nuclear, solar or wind Correct word choice
apply
power
and hydropower
were kept under 5 quadrillion
units
of
each and will have been Change preposition
apply
remain
under 10 quarterly Change the verb form
remaining
remained
and
Correct word choice
apply
units
up to 2030. Both nuclear ,solar and wind power
will have been showed
a marginal rise Change the verb form
showing
shown
while
usage
of hydropower
remain
Change the verb form
remains
same
.Correct article usage
the same
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usage, power, hydropower, quadrillion, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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