The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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illustrate
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the
usage
of different kind of energy sources in
USA
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the USA
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from 1980 to 2030.
In
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overall
,all most all the
power
sources will have
been
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increased in 2030 except
hydropower
usage
of Petroleum fuel will be the stayed as the highest consuming energy method from the beginning to the end of
predicted
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the predicted
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period and
lowest
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the lowest
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one will be
hydropower
. Consumption of petroleum and oil was 35
quadrillion
units
in 1980 and will have an
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upward
trend until the end of the predicted time (more than 45
quadrillion
units
) Coal
also
will have been
showed
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the
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more or less similar increment with several fluctuations
while
natural gas was slightly climbed by five
quadrillion
units
between 1980 to 2015 and will have a plateau until 2030.
Furthermore
,
usage
of all three
power
sources named
as
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nuclear, solar or wind
power
and
hydropower
were kept under 5
quadrillion
units
of
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each and will have been
remain
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under 10 quarterly
and
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units
up to 2030. Both nuclear ,solar and wind
power
will have been
showed
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showing
shown
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a marginal rise
while
usage
of
hydropower
remain
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remains
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same
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the same
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words usage, power, hydropower, quadrillion, units with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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