The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category or exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category or exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The bar chart and table illustrate how much a state earned for selling 5 different
products
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to other countries in 2015 and 2016 and changes in these sales in proportion. Units are measured in billion of dollars. Looking from an
overall
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perspective, it is readily apparent that petroleum
products
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were the most money provider among these five,
whereas
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textiles
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were the least. ,
Moreover
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, the widest disparity between 2015 and 2016 gains belongs to
textiles
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. In the first diagram, it is observed that petroleum
products
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and engineered goods were paid for most by foreign countries in 2015 ( approximately 60 and 55 respectively) and
also
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in 2016 (just over 60 for both). These figures were followed by gems/jewellery and agricultural
products
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in both two years which were roughly 40 and 30 respectively.
Textiles
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were the least source of income in 2015 and the income was around 25 billion dollars and
also
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in 2016. (slightly over 30)
According to
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the second picture,
textiles
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saw the most significant difference between gains in two years which was 15.24%. In comparison, the money made from agricultural
products
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remained almost steady and the change was only 0.81%. Engineered goods represented the second widest disparity with 8.5%, followed by gems/jewellery (5.18%) and petroleum goods.(3%)
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words products, textiles with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • categories
  • value
  • percentage change
  • compare
  • trends
  • changes
  • chart
  • table
  • overview
  • introduce
  • highlight
  • describe
  • summarize
  • information
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