Internet access helps young people and workers achieve their education and work golds more easily than before. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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development, entrancing the network is becoming more and more useful for people in the world in order to achieve education and work targets that adolescents and workers need ease than before.
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positive so that citizens be able to more successful in future, I
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personally
disagree
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idea.
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the one hand, these days residents often access the
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so as to assist them
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able to learn about things that they want to know. If students search
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knowledge
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subjects by retrieving
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, they will score higher in exams compared to other people.
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,
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connection is a bigger advantage for
teenages
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teenagers
who are in need of quantity for greater
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knowledge
compared to only
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form
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books. Taking for
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development
of society, big companies usually use apps word to work and
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to
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job exchange and so help
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workers save a lot of time and achieve greater efficiency.
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the other hand, everything has
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and
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including
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entrance
that going to make children easily addicted. In fact,
teenages
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teenagers
are able to learn bad habits in apps like
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, youtube and some social platforms.
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, high tech crime rate increase
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significantly
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devolopment
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development
internet
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. Some
youngster
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wasted plenty of time on social networks
instead
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of studying. In conclusion, for the reason
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, even
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adolescents and workers succeed in their educational and work goals thanks to
internet
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connect
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, I personally disagree because it
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has
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negatives
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for everyone

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