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Some believe it is justifiable to raise the college tuition fee. To what extend do you agree/disagree?

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In many nations,
education
 is very important and many schools would increase the
tuition
 fee every year. In my opinion, I do not agree about raising the
tuition
 fee because I think everyone must have educated and government must support them, so
this
 essay will write about the value of
education
 for people and the negative results of expensive
tuition
 fees. The first idea that comes to mind is
education
 is very beneficial for everyone and
also
,
education
 can change their life
for example
 people who have great
education
 will have a good job and get more income.
Secondly
,
education
 should be equal for everyone.
Third,
education
 can develop the country. On the other point of ,view someone believes that a raise in
tuition
 fee is good for developing schools because there can use the money to buy technology and pay for good teachers and they always thinks good knowledge must pay for because the student can get more money after graduation.
To sum up
, I totally agree that
education
 is very important for humans and good
education
 do not need to pay a lot of money because there can get more benefit for many things like communities, life, family, and business.
In addition
,
education
 can help the government develop their countries.
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