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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages? These days many students continue their higher education in foreign countries. The main benefit for students studying abroad is access to higher quality education and improved job prospects.

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On the one hand, there
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 been many factors that encourage more and more students to expose to a better environment. First and foremost, they are able to study in prestige educational institutes, which results in a better employment
oportunity
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opportunity
 after graduation, or even they can be employed in a global company
while
 they are studying. Another reason for
this
,
they
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 can have a better standard of
livings
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, when it comes to residing in developed nations, leading to safety and
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a higer
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higer
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higher
 happiness level
due to
friendly
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 environment. 
Moreover
, if they get educated in a foreign
countrie
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country
, they are likely to get to learn more about
multi-cultural
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multicultural
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 society, and they tend to benefit from
such
 language skills, which helps widen their perspectives.
On the other hand
,
learning
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by learning
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in
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at
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 their local universities or colleges, learners can improve their academic skills and require less effort rather than studying abroad.
Firstly
, they can
enroll
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 in certain courses which help them thrive in their suitable future career, and it is not necessary for them to use other languages except their mother tongue,
therefore
, they will find it much easier to be lectured.
Secondly
, it will be much
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 to pay a tuition fee for several
cources
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courses
sources
 in their local academic institutes.
For example
, they can not only spend their cheaper fee but
they
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can
also
 take a loan for a course they select. In conclusion,
although
 studying abroad might cost a lot of money, which is more than studying in a native community, I argue that the benefits
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outweigh
 its drawbacks for many reasons.
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