The table below shows the sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the selling of a
coffee
shop located in an office building on a typical weekday.
Overall
, every period of the day is characterized by the
sales
of a specific item, for ,instance in the
,
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morning the
sales
of
pastries
are overtaking the others accounting for 265. Looking into more details, we see that
besides
pastries
,
coffee
is
also
bought in a big quantity equal to 265,
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however
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fewer people bought tea and
sandwiches
in the early morning. Between 10:30 and 2:30, most people order the most
sandwiches
(200), followed by
coffee
185, but there's still a big number who buy
pastries
not like the early morning.
However
, the sellings of tee decreased in the same period but the dramatic fall is afternoon,
while
the
sales
of
coffee
and
pastries
are slightly equal to almost 150. But the
sandwiches
decreased quickly to 40 in
this
period. In the evening, the
sales
of
coffee
overstepp the others with 200, followed by the
sandwiches
but the
pastries
and tea don't exceed 100.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, sales, pastries, sandwiches with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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