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with the development of online communication, people will never be alone will always be able to make friends. to what extent do you agree?

Over the past few decades, there was
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significant growth in
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. It is a public opinion that-,
people
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 can easily make friends and not feels lonely because of the new advent of social media
communication
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. I vehemently agree with the statement.
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 disquisition delineates the reason for my agreement. In the modern era,
People
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 can make friends from all parts of the world by using new
technology
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.
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 makes a
person
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 feel more comfortable and never think, which is not alone.
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, A
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 is living alone outside his hometown. |
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, He can contact his family through Online
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such
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 as Skype, Botim, and Facebook. As a
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result he never feels sad because
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 his family is just a call away.
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,
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 new
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 sometimes is a blessing for
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.
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, If any emergency situation happens, we can call our neighbours or relatives fastly on the phone.
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, there are so many pupils, which
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 not willing to study outside the country because of homesickness, for them
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,
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 new
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 encourages them to study outside. They can daily hear and see the family. It is a great support for students studying in outside countries.
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 new implementation,
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people
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 strong because all are around them. On the other side, There are few demerits to online
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. Overuse of online
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 makes a
person
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 introverted.
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 meets directly with a
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, he feels shy to talk because he or she were used to
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platform
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 will destroy our
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 skills. The future of a
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 must need direct
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.
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 media will reduce the chance to direct meetings.
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myriad
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reasons to justify the aforementioned statement has
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 of benefits to the
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.We can save a life and
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 these new technologies give happiness to individuals, who
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 staying alone. Hopefully, In the future, there will be more and more new
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 will come to support society.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • geographical gaps
  • interact
  • social media platforms
  • messaging apps
  • revolutionized
  • physical distance
  • online communities
  • camaraderie
  • immediate surroundings
  • unparalleled opportunities
  • superficial relationships
  • excessive reliance
  • emotional warmth
  • tactile comfort
  • digital communication
  • digital divide
  • internet censorship
  • global connectivity
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