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The maps below show the changes in a town after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam.

The maps below show the changes in a town after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam.
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The maps below represent the structure of a region and its modifications in 1990 and in 2010.
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, it is noticed the transition from a region with a predominantly natural environment in 1990 to an industrial area in 2010. In 1990 the most important element was a river that was replaced in the centre, which resources were used for the irrigation of farmlands that belong to villages that are situated on the eastern side of
river
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. On the other sore was a reservation with endangered species of animals and plants, a forest and some ancient architecture. The area is isolated in
south
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the south
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 and
nord
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north
 by a
a
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mountain chain. In 2010 the structure suffered radical changes
as a result
od
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of
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costruction
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construction
 of a
hydroelectronic
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hydroelectric
dumb
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dam
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 on the lake. In the
concequence
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consequence
, rare animals and plants were extinct and ancient structures
demoled
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demolished
.
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on
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the map
is
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observed the absence of forests in the north as
result
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a result
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 of
deforstation
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deforestation
.
On
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 their place, in the south has been built an
infrastucture
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infrastructure
 for supporting the hydroelectric power station,
where
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which
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also
 was replaced villages. On the place of farmlands is built
an
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a
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 hotel, next to the
acumulation
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accumulation
 lake that now is a source of fish.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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