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The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.
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The bar charts indicate how the proportion of
people
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 born in or outside
Australia
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 living in three different regions changed in the years between 1995 and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the rate of
people
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 deciding to live in cities bulged in 2010 no matter in or outside
Australia
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.
In contrast
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, the living rate in towns and rural
areas
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 decreased obviously in 2010 for both types of citizens.
First,
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the number of
people
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 living in urban dominated the population distribution in either 1995 or 2021. there was 50% of
people
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 born in
Australia
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 and lived in cities in 1995, and
this
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 figure increased to about 63% in 2010.
In addition
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, the percentage of
people
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 born outside
Australia
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 was the highest value at 60% in 1995, and it climbed to 80% in 2021.
Second,
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regarding the other two living places, rural
areas
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 were more popular than town
areas
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 generally. To be precise, for
people
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 born in
Australia
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, there were 20% and 15%
people
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 who like to live in towns, but for
people
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 born outside
Australia
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, there were 30% and 40%
people
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 living in rural
areas
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.
However
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, it changed in 2010. the proportions of Australians living in towns and rural
areas
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 were the same, with about 18%, and the percentages of non-Australians living in these two
areas
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 were about 10 and 5% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, australia, areas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • urbanization
  • migration patterns
  • population distribution
  • percentage points
  • growth rate
  • decline
  • trend analysis
  • socioeconomic factors
  • infrastructure development
  • rural exodus
  • census data
  • lifestyle changes
  • residential patterns
  • immigration policies
  • emigration
  • natural increase
  • birth rate
  • settlement patterns
  • push and pull factors
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