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The government should spend money in promoting sport and art in school, rather than sponsoring professional sports and art events in communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (Government)

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The professional
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sports
 and
the
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cultural
programs
 have been in existence for a long time and have played an important part in
people
's life.
Therefore
, I disagree that government should direct the funds allocated to
such
 events towards encouraging
sports
 and arts among school students. A number of arguments support my opinion.
To begin
 with,
the
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professional
sports
 bring name and fame to a country. Countries, which spend a lot on
such
sports
, are always leading in
sports
 in the Olympic Games, the World Cup and other
such
 international competitions. Professional
sports
also
 boost the economy as millions of spectators come to see and cheer for their favourite teams in the stadiums. There are
also
 big benefits from advertisements on TV as millions of
people
 sit in front of
TV
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 and watch
sports
 shows.
Furthermore
,
the
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cultural
programs
 are effective ways that help
people
 relax and reduce stress after work. Every day, there are a variety of cultural performances happening all over the world. These fascinate thousands of young
people
as well as
 adults. These cultural
programs
 not only enrich
people
's
mind
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,
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 but
also
 spread our rich culture globally.
Finally
, it is difficult to motivate children to take up
sports
 and arts without naming and praising
super stars
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 in professional activities. The success
from
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people
such
 as Sachin Tendulkar (a cricket player) or A R Rehman (a musician) is even more important in encouraging children to participate in
sport
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sports
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 and art subjects than any other kind of
motivators
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. How could we tell our children to put more
efforts
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on
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 arts and
sports
 if it would not lead to any money and success in the future?
To sum up
, it can be reiterated that spending on professional
sports
 and cultural
programs
 is imperative for
the
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governments. Promoting
sports
 in schools should
also
 be there, but not at the expense of professional
sports
 and cultural events.
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