The graph below shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides information about the
percentage
of
people
visiting cinemas in a European country on different days of the week during 2003, 2005 and 2007. The graph clearly shows that
Saturday
was the most preferred day to visit theatres during all three years. In 2003, only 10% of
people
visited on Monday, making it the least preferred day of the week. The
percentage
showed a gradual increase during the weekdays with some fluctuations in between.
Saturday
hit the highest point with a
percentage
up to 40%, but still lower than in the
year
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2005 and 2007. Friday and Sunday remained constant
with
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exactly 30%. In 2005, Monday, Wednesday and Thursday showed an equal
percentage
of visitors which was around 14%.
On the other hand
, Tuesday experienced an upward trend with approximately 17%. Friday and Sunday showed a sharp increase in visitors, with 30% and around 33% respectively.
However
,
Saturday
was reported to have
maximum
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number of
people
in all three years, which is 45%. In 2007, The weekdays had some fluctuations, but Wednesday had the least
percentage
of
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around 8, in all three years. Friday and Sunday showed a similar trend to 2005.
However
,
Saturday
was again the most preferred day with about 43% of
people
visiting the cinemas.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, people, saturday with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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