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Your next door neighbour own a small dog that bark throughout day and the night. Write a letter to your neighbour requesting that something be done about the dog. Your reason for writing. What you would like to happen. A nice respectful style.

#door #neighbour #dog #bark #night #reason #style
Dear
Mr.
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 Johnson, Hope all is well at your end I am writing
this
 letter to complain about your
dog
 it is barking throughout
day
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the day
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 and night
as well as
 I have been facing many problems. I am Eva Smith, living
in
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next door to your house. As
,
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 I am working as an account manager in an international business market company. But I am facing numerous problems because of your pet as it is
a
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barking the whole day.
Due to
this
, I do not complete my official work
as well as
rest
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.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, I suggest you should
an
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install
the
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soundproof glasses on the windows and doors
then
 your
puppy
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 barking sound can not disturb the community's people
besides
this
 you will leave your
dog
 in the
dog's
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 centre and it provides proper care
of
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for
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 your
dog
like
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as own
dog
. All in all, we live in a society as a family. So I suggest you will take some positive steps because it is essential for our life.
Due to
barking
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the barking
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 of
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the dog
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dogs
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dog
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 I can not concentrate on my work and study. Henceforth, it puts
a detrimental effects
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a detrimental effect
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 on my career and health. Looking forward to your positive response. Yours sincerely, Eva Smith.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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