The diagram below shows the water supply in Australia at present and in the future
The diagram below illustrates the supply of
water
in Australia now and in the future.
Overall
,it is clear that
the first step in both pictures of the supplement is the "Dam/Storage",from where pure water
flows to human establishments.In this
place way of its use differs.While
wastewater goes to the "Water
treatment
plant
" and stormwater goes straightly to the river
in our days, all water
by prediction will be transferred to the Water
treatment
plant
.
Firstly
,from the first point which is called Storage in both maps water
flows to different types of people's needs.Now,Australia's stormwater flows to the river
,however
, in the future it will be supplied to the Water
treatment
plant
and wastewater will go there too,without flowing to the river
,while
in the days after the "Water
treatment
plant
" it moves to the Add a comma
,plant
river
.
Secondly
,the second map which is a prediction gives an example of the great use of water
.All types of water
will be used for plants neither and it is wasted now by draining it into the river
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