The diagram below shows the water supply in Australia at present and in the future
The diagram below illustrates the supply of
water
in Australia now and in the future.
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Overall
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it is clear that
the first step in both pictures of the supplement is the "Dam/Storage",from where pure Linking Words
water
flows to human establishments.In Use synonyms
this
place way of its use differs.Linking Words
While
wastewater goes to the "Linking Words
Water
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treatment
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plant
" and stormwater goes straightly to the Use synonyms
river
in our days, all Use synonyms
water
by prediction will be transferred to the Use synonyms
Water
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treatment
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plant
.
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Firstly
,from the first point which is called Storage in both maps Linking Words
water
flows to different types of people's needs.Now,Australia's stormwater flows to the Use synonyms
river
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however
, in the future it will be supplied to the Linking Words
Water
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treatment
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plant
and wastewater will go there too,without flowing to the Use synonyms
river
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while
in the days after the "Linking Words
Water
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treatment
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plant
" it moves to the Add a comma
,plant
river
.
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Secondly
,the second map which is a prediction gives an example of the great use of Linking Words
water
.All types of Use synonyms
water
will be used for plants neither and it is wasted now by draining it into the Use synonyms
river
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