The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008.

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The bar charts show data about UK

graduate

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and postgraduate persons

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they

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did not go

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work

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next leaving university in 2008. In 2008, UK graduate and postgraduate students indicated four types

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of level

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level

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, namely

full

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full-time

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time

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work

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voluntray

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voluntary

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further

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study

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unemployment. The bar charts compare two

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education

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field. Each

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had shown

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study

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work

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quantity reached a peak.

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voluntary

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same number because plenty of students need for living costs so

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causing was illustrated

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voluntary

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down. In 2008,

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of graduates

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nearly 17735 and 29665 respectively. Meantime voluntary

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pupils were 3500,

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unemployment

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number had been 16235 in 2008.

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postgraduates

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2725,

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voluntary

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hit a low and was 345 but

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and unemployment

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2535 and 1625 respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, work, study with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

170 words

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