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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about energy consumption in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about energy consumption in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph provides information about the
amount
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 of consumption and prediction of
energy
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 in the USA over the time period 5 decades, starting from 1980 till 2030.
Overall
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, all
energy
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sources
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 have experienced an upward trend,
whereas
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 fossil
sources
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 have more
amount
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 than renewable
sources
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.
Also
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, fossil
sources
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 dramatically
increase
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, and the petrol-oil sector uses mostly.
However
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, renewable
sources
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increase
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 bit by bit. When we look at the fossil
energy
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sources
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 consumption
amount
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 in detail, the
amount
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 of petrol was 35
quadrillion
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units
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 in 1980, and it
increase
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 sharply to
reached
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 about 42
quadrillion
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units
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 in 2020. It will peak
to
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at
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 approximately 50
quadrillion
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units
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 in 2030 by guesses. Coal and natural gas were 15
quadrillion
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units
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 and 20
quadrillion
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units
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 respectively in 1980. In 2013, both
energy
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sources
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amout
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amount
 were
same
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the same
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that is
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 about 22
quadrillion
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units
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. End of the given time period,
coal
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the coal
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consuption
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consumption
rate
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 will be
morre
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more
 than the natural gas
rate
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 which
are
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is
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 almost 30
quadrillion
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units
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 and 25
quadrillion
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units
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 respectively. When we look at
the
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apply
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renewable
souces
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sources
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 in detail. all
energy
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using
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use
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rate
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rates
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 were the same which is less than 5
quadrillion
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units
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 in 1980. In 1995,
solar
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the solar
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/wind number was more than hydropower.
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, in 2010, hydropower was the least
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energy
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sources
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source
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 and solar/wind
energy
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sources
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was
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were
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 the second place. These
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sources
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source's
sources'
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rate
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rates
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 will not change by 2030 by guesses,
while
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 nuclear
source
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sources
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increase
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 a bit and it will
countinue
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continue
with
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at
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same
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the same
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rate
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that is
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 more than 5
quadrillion
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units
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, that is".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, energy, sources, increase, quadrillion, units, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • energy consumption
  • trends
  • marked increase
  • dominant source
  • modest increase
  • projections
  • renewable energy
  • nuclear energy
  • noticeable decline
  • span
  • petroleum
  • natural gas
  • coal
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