The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about energy consumption in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about energy consumption in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
The given graph provides information about the
amount
of consumption and prediction of
energy
in the USA over the time period 5 decades, starting from 1980 till 2030.
Overall
, all
energy
sources
have experienced an upward trend,
whereas
fossil
sources
have more
amount
than renewable
sources
.
Also
, fossil
sources
dramatically
increase
, and the petrol-oil sector uses mostly.
However
, renewable
sources
increase
bit by bit. When we look at the fossil
energy
sources
consumption
amount
in detail, the
amount
of petrol was 35
quadrillion
units
in 1980, and it
increase
sharply to
reached
Change the form of the verb
reach
show examples
about 42
quadrillion
units
in 2020. It will peak
to
Change preposition
at
show examples
approximately 50
quadrillion
units
in 2030 by guesses. Coal and natural gas were 15
quadrillion
units
and 20
quadrillion
units
respectively in 1980. In 2013, both
energy
sources
amout
Correct your spelling
amount
were
same
Correct article usage
the same
show examples
that is
about 22
quadrillion
units
. End of the given time period,
coal
Correct article usage
the coal
show examples
consuption
Correct your spelling
consumption
rate
will be
morre
Correct your spelling
more
than the natural gas
rate
which
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
show examples
almost 30
quadrillion
units
and 25
quadrillion
units
respectively. When we look at
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
renewable
souces
Correct your spelling
sources
show examples
in detail. all
energy
using
Wrong verb form
use
show examples
rate
Fix the agreement mistake
rates
show examples
were the same which is less than 5
quadrillion
units
in 1980. In 1995,
solar
Correct article usage
the solar
show examples
/wind number was more than hydropower.
However
, in 2010, hydropower was the least
using
Wrong verb form
used
show examples
energy
sources
Fix the agreement mistake
source
show examples
and solar/wind
energy
sources
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
show examples
the second place. These
sources
Change noun form
source's
sources'
show examples
rate
Fix the agreement mistake
rates
show examples
will not change by 2030 by guesses,
while
nuclear
source
Fix the agreement mistake
sources
show examples
increase
a bit and it will
countinue
Correct your spelling
continue
with
Change preposition
at
show examples
same
Change the article
the same
show examples
rate
that is
more than 5
quadrillion
units
.
Submitted by yunussemreozkaya on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, that is".
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, energy, sources, increase, quadrillion, units, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
Topic Vocabulary:
  • energy consumption
  • trends
  • marked increase
  • dominant source
  • modest increase
  • projections
  • renewable energy
  • nuclear energy
  • noticeable decline
  • span
  • petroleum
  • natural gas
  • coal
What to do next:
Look at other essays: