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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about energy consumption in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about energy consumption in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph provides information about the
amount
 of consumption and prediction of
energy
 in the USA over the time period 5 decades, starting from 1980 till 2030.
Overall
, all
energy
sources
 have experienced an upward trend,
whereas
 fossil
sources
 have more
amount
 than renewable
sources
.
Also
, fossil
sources
 dramatically
increase
, and the petrol-oil sector uses mostly.
However
, renewable
sources
increase
 bit by bit. When we look at the fossil
energy
sources
 consumption
amount
 in detail, the
amount
 of petrol was 35
quadrillion
units
 in 1980, and it
increase
 sharply to
reached
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reach
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 about 42
quadrillion
units
 in 2020. It will peak
to
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at
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 approximately 50
quadrillion
units
 in 2030 by guesses. Coal and natural gas were 15
quadrillion
units
 and 20
quadrillion
units
 respectively in 1980. In 2013, both
energy
sources
amout
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amount
 were
same
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the same
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that is
 about 22
quadrillion
units
. End of the given time period,
coal
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the coal
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consuption
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consumption
rate
 will be
morre
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more
 than the natural gas
rate
 which
are
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is
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 almost 30
quadrillion
units
 and 25
quadrillion
units
 respectively. When we look at
the
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apply
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renewable
souces
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sources
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 in detail. all
energy
using
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use
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rate
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rates
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 were the same which is less than 5
quadrillion
units
 in 1980. In 1995,
solar
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the solar
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/wind number was more than hydropower.
However
, in 2010, hydropower was the least
using
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used
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energy
sources
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source
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 and solar/wind
energy
sources
was
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were
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 the second place. These
sources
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source's
sources'
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rate
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rates
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 will not change by 2030 by guesses,
while
 nuclear
source
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sources
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increase
 a bit and it will
countinue
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continue
with
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at
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same
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the same
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rate
that is
 more than 5
quadrillion
units
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, that is".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, energy, sources, increase, quadrillion, units, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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