The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about energy consumption in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
The given graph provides information about the
amount
of consumption and prediction of energy
in the USA over the time period 5 decades, starting from 1980 till 2030.
Overall
, all energy
sources
have experienced an upward trend, whereas
fossil sources
have more amount
than renewable sources
. Also
, fossil sources
dramatically increase
, and the petrol-oil sector uses mostly. However
, renewable sources
increase
bit by bit.
When we look at the fossil energy
sources
consumption amount
in detail, the amount
of petrol was 35 quadrillion
units
in 1980, and it increase
sharply to reached
about 42 Change the form of the verb
reach
quadrillion
units
in 2020. It will peak to
approximately 50 Change preposition
at
quadrillion
units
in 2030 by guesses. Coal and natural gas were 15 quadrillion
units
and 20 quadrillion
units
respectively in 1980. In 2013, both energy
sources
amout
were Correct your spelling
amount
same
Correct article usage
the same
that is
about 22 quadrillion
units
. End of the given time period, coal
Correct article usage
the coal
consuption
Correct your spelling
consumption
rate
will be morre
than the natural gas Correct your spelling
more
rate
which are
almost 30 Correct subject-verb agreement
is
quadrillion
units
and 25 quadrillion
units
respectively.
When we look at the
renewable Correct article usage
apply
souces
in detail. all Correct your spelling
sources
energy
using
Wrong verb form
use
rate
were the same which is less than 5 Fix the agreement mistake
rates
quadrillion
units
in 1980. In 1995, solar
/wind number was more than hydropower.Correct article usage
the solar
However
, in 2010, hydropower was the least using
Wrong verb form
used
energy
sources
and solar/wind Fix the agreement mistake
source
energy
sources
was
the second place. These Correct subject-verb agreement
were
sources
Change noun form
source's
sources'
rate
will not change by 2030 by guesses, Fix the agreement mistake
rates
while
nuclear source
Fix the agreement mistake
sources
increase
a bit and it will countinue
Correct your spelling
continue
with
Change preposition
at
same
Change the article
the same
rate
that is
more than 5 quadrillion
units
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, energy, sources, increase, quadrillion, units, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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