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It is important to use land for human needs such as farming, housing, and industry than to save it for endangered animals. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#land #industry #animals
In the
comtemporary
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contemporary
 era,
urbanization
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the urbanization
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 policy of the government is implemented
with
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in
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 different ways regarding protecting
habitats
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the habitats
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 of
the
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animal
species
,
also
this
 issue has to
be stayed
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equal
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equally
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 with the others. In
this
 essay, I will illustrate the pros and cons of utilizing
acreses
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acres
 for distinctive purposes based on my perspective and support with examples as well. First and foremost, human nature tends to find out something in order to
expanding
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 unfamiliar areas throughout the period. Without a shadow of
doubt
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, the urbanization
process
 is detrimental
for
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to
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the
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nature,
however
 attaining high living
standart
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standard
 people tend to leave their countryside for the cities and
this
 occasion increases the count of citizens.
Hence
, the government is obliged to provide the
infrastucture
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infrastructure
in
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which the living area for folk. Utilizing many kinds of construction materials and vehicles
cause
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causes
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to
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noise and air pollution. At the same time during the
process
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the
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deforestation drastically increases. As a
resut
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result
 of building and industrializing led to
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an increase
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increase
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carbon
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in carbon
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dioxid
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dioxide
 ratio
on
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air
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. On the flip side, conducting rescue
area
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areas
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 for animal
species
 is
more
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 significant issue than industrialization. Because if rare animal
species
 have already
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been extincted
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extincted
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extinct
, human beings would not accomplish to revive back. But agricultural areas,
also
 building blocks can be
tear
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torn
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 down and again these
process
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processes
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 can be restarted on the other appropriate lands. In conclusion, from my point of view, farming and urbanization
process
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processes
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 can be applied with protecting the land of endangered
species
 together.
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