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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. https://ibb.co/1Xgz7MH

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. https://ibb.co/1Xgz7MH
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The table depicts the
money
 that police
station
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stations
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 earned in 2 years, 2017 and 2018,
in
particular
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a particular
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area
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areas
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 of
UK
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the UK
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.
Whereas
, the pie chart illustrates how much
money
 was distributed in three main categories: stipends, technology and infrastructure and transport. It can be seen that the income from
national
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the national
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 government was the most during the period and the police budget was spent
for
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on
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 salaries took the largest proportion in total. In gaining sources,
national
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the national
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 government made the greatest amount of
money
, around 175
millions
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million
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 in two years.
Similarly
,
the
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 minority of income sources
such
 as grants
were
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contributed to the budget
in
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of
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 38
millions
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million
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.
Interestly
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Interestingly
, the income
took
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taken
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 from local taxes rose lightly
at
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to
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 10
millions
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million
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 between 2017 and 2018. In
spending
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the spending
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 chart, two third of
money
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the money
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 was distributed in stipends for staff and offers. The infrastructure and transportation remained
the
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at the
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 exact percentage
as
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of
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 17% between two years, 2017 and 2018. Surprisingly, the statistic of technology spending had a moderate increase at 6% during the same period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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