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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays some people tend to have the idea that we should not try to solve the
climate
change
 problem but adapt to it .I disagree with
this
 statement I tend to think that
climate
change
 is a major problem which should be solved as soon as possible
otherwise
 it will cause more damage to the environment than it has already done but it is not so easy to deal with it and a possible option is to reduce the impact of temperature
change
 on the environment But the first issue is that it is a damage for government finance ,
for example
, to avoid a sea level rise the government should build a wall which requires a great budget .
Secondly
,it cannot protect us entirely, one day the wall we built will fall or the sea level will rise even higher.
Climate
change
 not only a sea level rise but
also
 we can get out of supply because of unsuitable weather for plants and even if we will grow them in greenhouses
this
 requires heat so we should burn fossil fuels,
as a result
, we cause gas emissions and consciously support the
climate
change
 problem In conclusion, liquidating the root of damages is far more effective than defending from it
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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