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The number of people who are overweight is constantly growing, and the only solution is to increase the prices of unhealthy food and drinks. Do you agree or disagree?

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The rising
number
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 of overweight individuals has become a major problem in society. More and more
people
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 are consuming unhealthy
food
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 and beverages
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 as fast foods, processed foods, and even some drinks that have strong alcohol. Some
people
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 argue that we should increase the prices of the foods that damage our physical health.
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, I believe that there should be more effective alternatives to solve
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 problem. Adjusting the
food
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 price is a direct method to reduce the increasing
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 of obese
people
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. For the government or companies, it is
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 easy to implement because they will not have higher costs.
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,
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 solution is not perfect and still has a large
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 of drawbacks.
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, it only affects a particular section of society. Those
people
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 who are from a higher income bracket can easily afford the inflated
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 price and would not stop buying unhealthy products.
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,
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 is a solution for short-term rather than long-term impact because after a
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 there will be public criticism. As time goes on,
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critical voices will gradually emerge. From other perspectives, we might have some better solutions to deal with
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 problem. The government could provide a subsidy to help everyone purchase healthy
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 and
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 support enterprises connected with green
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 or body health
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 as low subscriptions to fitness centres.
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, promoting organic
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 could be an effective strategy
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 as advertising the benefits to the public or organizing some events promoting green
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 and diet. By way of conclusion, increasing the prices of unhealthy
food
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 might not be the best way to cut down the
number
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 of obese
people
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 but there are still a variety of methods to help
people
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 make better choices.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unhealthy food
  • obesity
  • nutritional information
  • subsidizing
  • socioeconomic backgrounds
  • psychological factors
  • overeating
  • healthy lifestyles
  • community programs
  • personal responsibility
  • dietary choices
  • physical activity
  • accessible
  • equitable
  • promoting
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