Some people believe that advertisements aimed at children should be banned. Others argue that advertisements have a positive impact on children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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some examples will be provided to make it more clear.
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First,
from Linking Words
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some youngsters maybe can easily get what they want to improve their life. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, they can get more information that maybe they never find at school. Linking Words
For example
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advertisements
today provide clear information based on their target. Use synonyms
Moreover
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as books or any school materials and Linking Words
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some discounts will be provided to attract their consumers. Fix the agreement mistake
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children
do not need to visit stores physically to get any information about things that they want to buy.
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However
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As a result
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task response
Your introduction sets the stage for the discussion, but consider refining your thesis statement to clearly express your opinion or the direction your essay will take. This will make your stance or central argument clearer.
coherence
Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and logically follows from the one before. This will improve the logical flow of your essay and ensure coherence.
task response
Work on fully developing your ideas with detailed explanations and examples. This will make your arguments more convincing and comprehensive.
coherence correction
Try to use a wider range of cohesive devices to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs. This will strengthen the coherence of your essay.
task response
You have effectively presented both sides of the argument in your essay, which is essential to this task type.
structure
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which help frame your discussion well.
task achievement
You have included examples to support your points, which adds depth to your argument.
Your opinion
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