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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps depict the site of the University Sports Center now and after redevelopment in the future.
Overall
, the whole
center
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 will be turned into an indoor one.
Moreover
, there will be additional facilities to be used by the students. From the current layout, a reception can be seen straight ahead when entering the building through the entrance in the south. Behind it, is a 25-meter pool with a changing room to its west and seating to its east. These facilities will remain unchanged. The gym on the north side will
also
 still be in its place but expanded eastward after the redevelopment. In the future, the current western outdoor court will be turned into a leisure pool, which visitors will be able to enter through the new changing room on the left corner. On the opposite side, the old eastern court will be replaced with a sports hall
along with
 two dance studios, separated by a corridor. These new amenities will have a changing room on the right corner.
Lastly
, a sports shop and a cafe will be opened for the visitants.
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