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Task 1 Academic: The graph below shows the average consumption of cheese per person in England, Scotland, Wales and Northern Ireland between 1980 and 2020.

Task 1 Academic: The graph below shows the average consumption of cheese per person in England, Scotland, Wales and Northern Ireland between 1980 and 2020.
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The line graph compares the trends of average
cheese
consumption
 per person in four
countries
 of the UK from 1980 to 2020.
Overall
,
England
 and
Scotland
 witnessed a gradual decrease in the
consumption
 of
cheese
, and that of Wales and Northern Ireland rose steadily;
however
, the figure for
England
 was still the highest over the period surveyed. In 1980, approximately 112kg of
cheese
consumption
 was recorded in
England
; meanwhile, that of
Scotland
 was recorded
around
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 85kg. In the next 10 years, the amount of
cheese
 consumed in
England
 decreased slightly to 108kg,
whereas
Scotland
 observed a steady rise to over 100kg. In the following years, both
countries
 had
then
 seen a noticeable decline in the quantity of
cheese
 consumed by 2020;
additionally
, ranked
last
 in four
countries
 was the figure for
Scotland
,
reported
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 around 59kg in the final year. In terms of
other
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the other
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 two
countries
, the amount of
cheese
 consumed in Wales was recorded at 45kg in the first year, compared to Northern Ireland with around 12kg. After 40 years, a gradual growth can be seen in
the
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cheese
consumption
 in Wales, recorded
over
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 75kg in 2020;
similarly
, the figure for Northern Ireland went up dramatically to about 60kg, overtaking that of
Scotland
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cheese, consumption, countries, england, scotland, kg with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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