The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps compare the current layout with the planned redesign of an industrial area in Norbiton. For the
part
of the
town
that is
southern to the river, a great number of housings will be built with the current factories to be removed and axillary facilities to be built. New transportation road is expected to be put into use in the future. Meanwhile, there will be no major changes to the northern
part
of the river. The southern
part
of the
town
will have many houses
be
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built
according to
the plan,
while
the present factories
being
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removed. A new ring road is expected to be built and
road
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the road
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will be extended to
northwest
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. Shops,
as well as
a medical
center
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, will be reconstructed adjacent to the
ringroad
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ring road
. Meanwhile, a school; with a playground will be built in the southeastern
part
of the
town
. As for the northern
part
of the
town
, a new house will be built
while
the current layout of
farmland
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will be preserved. It is worth mentioning that a bridge crossing the river will be constructed, connecting the northern and southern
part
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parts
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of the
town
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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