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Some people think that a person improves intellectual skills better when doing group activities. To what extent do you agree? Use specific details and examples to explain your view.

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In the modern world, it has been seen that
people
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 argue about whether
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an individual
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individual
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individuals
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 should carry any
task
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 in
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group
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a group
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 or not. Some
other
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 make their opinion that the youth must perform any activities in
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group
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the group
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 because it increases the different abilities. I will explain my views in the forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with, working in
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group
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 is always very effective because it transmits knowledge
among
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 every
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 very efficiently. When any person
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work
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 in
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group
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then
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 of any
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 will be accurate. Some
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 can not solve by
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 person, so they take assistance from seniors or others who have good knowledge about particular topics.
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, to improve
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 power of kids or children, educational institutes perform various types of
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 activities. They
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 organize different competitions
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 as sports, singing or dancing.
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, I am a software engineer so whenever I need any help
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 immediately anybody
guide
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 me irrespective of any
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.
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,
group
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 activities
not
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 only helpful for any kids but
also
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 very necessary for the
overall
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of
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development of any
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. On the paradoxical side, some
people
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 believe that working in
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groups is not
a
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 optimistic idea because it creates lots of disturbance and dispute
while
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 doing any
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.
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, they guide
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accordingly
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. Watching television, studying
hardly
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 and solving
the
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different puzzles enhance the thinking ability of
particular
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a particular
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 person. In their opinion, whenever anybody
perform
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 any
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 alone
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 they exert innumerable efforts to
be succeed
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.
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, every face has some merits and demerits but whenever we work in
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group
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then
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 our intellectual
increased
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 at a peak and it is very important for any human. Consider, when we work with different country
people
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they
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we automatically know their thinking abilities and if that
are
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 important we grasp the content.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • intellectual skills
  • group activities
  • collaborative learning
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • communication
  • interpersonal skills
  • diverse perspectives
  • creativity
  • individual study
  • personal reflection
  • autonomy
  • learning styles
  • approaches
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