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A serious problem affecting countries right across the globe is the lack of water for drinking, washing and other household uses. Why do many countries face water shortages, and what could be done to alleviate the problem?

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Water
 is one of the
necessaties
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necessities
necessaries
 of life. All living things can not survive without
water
.
Although
 our planet earth contains almost 97% of
water
 which falls under oceans and only 2-3% of the
water
 can be used for drinking and other purposes.
Firstly
, the problem that
now a days
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nowadays
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 countries are facing is
scarcity
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a scarcity
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 of
water
 because the
water
 level is going down
however
,
on the other hand
, the human population and its
water
 consumption is increasing day by day. The main reason behind
this
 can be global warming and other human activities that are
affecting
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. Because of global
warming
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people
 are facing harsh climatic conditions that result in low rainfall
that
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which
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 ultimately results in low
water
 levels.
For example
, in several
part
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parts
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 of
Africa
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,Africa
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 there are drought conditions and it causes the death of many
people
everday
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everyday
every day
. There are many possible solutions to combat
this
 problem. First of all,
people
 need to
aware
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about
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of
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 how they are wasting the most precious gift of God.
Water
 treatment
plant
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plants
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 need to be implanted to
recylce
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recycle
water
 to use it for drinking, cleaning and for other household purposes. Government should take steps and
made
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make
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 dams to store
water
 to be used during drought and low rainfall conditions. Government should
also
implment
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implement
 laws and start campaigns to guide
people
 about how they can save
water
?.
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.
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To conclude
, these days several countries are going through the problem of
water
 but it can
resolved
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be resolved
resolve
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 and
combat
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combated
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 by using several different ways.
People
 need to understand how they can use
water
wisley
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wisely
 and it can help and save
oue
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our
 future generations.
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