The bar chart below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different school in four country in 2001.

The bar chart below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different school in four country in 2001.
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The chart illustrates the number of
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that each teacher spend in different schools in four countries teaching students in 2001. The
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names are Japan, Spain, Iceland and the
USA
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.
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, it can clearly be seen that most of the
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spent
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in the upper secondary
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in the
USA
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landing at the top of the chart,
while
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the least number of
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was in the primary
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in Iceland. First of all, in Japan, teachers spend exactly 600
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in primary
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.
Then
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, almost 650
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are spent in lower secondary
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According to
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the upper secondary
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, 700
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were spent by the teachers. In Spain, most of the numbers reached 900
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in upper secondary
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, the least number of
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were spent in primary
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reaching approximately 650
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. After that, the tutors spend about 750
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in the lower secondary
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. By far, the
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spent in Iceland in primary and lower secondary schools were
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reaching 590 and 600
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, respectively.
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, 900
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were spent by the teachers in the upper secondary
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. In the
USA
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, higher than 700
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have been passed in primary
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, but 1000
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were occupied by the tutors in lower secondary
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. The highest score of the
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were
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1200
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and that
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occupied by the
USA
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in upper secondary
school
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