The bar chart below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different school in four country in 2001.

The bar chart below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different school in four country in 2001.
The chart illustrates the number of
hours
that each teacher spend in different schools in four countries teaching students in 2001. The
countries
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country's
countries'
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names are Japan, Spain, Iceland and the
USA
.
Overall
, it can clearly be seen that most of the
hours
spent
is
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in the upper secondary
school
in the
USA
landing at the top of the chart,
while
the least number of
hours
was in the primary
school
in Iceland. First of all, in Japan, teachers spend exactly 600
hours
in primary
school
.
Then
, almost 650
hours
are spent in lower secondary
school
.
According to
the upper secondary
school
, 700
hours
were spent by the teachers. In Spain, most of the numbers reached 900
hours
in upper secondary
school
.
On the other hand
, the least number of
hours
were spent in primary
school
reaching approximately 650
hours
. After that, the tutors spend about 750
hours
in the lower secondary
school
. By far, the
hours
spent in Iceland in primary and lower secondary schools were
similar
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reaching 590 and 600
hours
, respectively.
However
, 900
hours
were spent by the teachers in the upper secondary
school
. In the
USA
, higher than 700
hours
have been passed in primary
school
, but 1000
hours
were occupied by the tutors in lower secondary
school
. The highest score of the
hours
were
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1200
hours
and that
were
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occupied by the
USA
in upper secondary
school
.
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