The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010
The chart illustrates the proportion of 6 different
age
groups of Australian males and females who exercised regularly in 2010.
Overall
, women engaged in physical activities more than men,
nevertheless
between
ages
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the ages
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of 15 to 24, males outnumbered females. It is noticeable that more than half of adult women from
age
35 to 64 exercised more in that year,
whereas
the young adults exercised less with a percentage of just over two-fifths.
Besides
the
age
of 15 to 24 that men had 52,8
percent
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per cent
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,
no
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and no
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other
age
group got more than half. The only
age
group that females and males almost equalised in doing exercise was the seniors from 65 years old and over with less than
1
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a 1
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% difference.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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