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The chart below gives information about Southland’s main exports in 2000, *20.., and future predictions for 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about Southland’s main exports in 2000, *20.., and future predictions for 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates data regarding Southland’s main exports in 2000 and the current
year
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, it
also
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 provides some predictions about the
year
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 2025.
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, it can be seen that Meat
Products
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 represent the category less exported in all of the 3 years chosen,
instead
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 International Tourism will increase exports until to 10
billion
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pounds
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 over the years. Dairy
Products
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 make up the biggest rise between 2000 and the current
year
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, reaching 10
billion
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pounds
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on
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 exportations.
At
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 more detailed look reveals that
Meat
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the Meat
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Products
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 future is on
decrease
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the decrease
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 over the years, in 2000 6
billion
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pounds
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 were obtained by the exportation of them, but
this
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 result falls a little bit in
this
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last
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year
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, and it is predicted that it will decrease up to almost 5
billion
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pounds
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.
It is clear that
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,
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 the
achieve
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 of 10
billion
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pounds
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 obtained by the exportation of Dairy
Products
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 is significant but unfortunately in 2005 it will slightly decrease.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, products, billion, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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