In some countries, it is possible for people to have a variety of food that has been transported from all over the world. Do the advantages outweigh the drawbacks?

In
this
contemporary epoch,
due to
globalisation
Add a comma
,globalisation
show examples
it become possible of people to have
a wide types
Correct the article-noun agreement
a wide type
wide types
show examples
of foods,which
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
show examples
transported
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
all over
world
Correct article usage
the world
show examples
.I deem that the merits of
transport
Wrong verb form
transporting
show examples
food
in the
world
are more
raither
Correct your spelling
rather
than demerits like
cheeep
Correct your spelling
cheap
cheep
products,long term
relationship
Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
show examples
and increase economy. On the one hand, owning of
severals
Correct your spelling
several
show examples
advantages of
large
Add an article
a large
the large
show examples
variety
of
food
in the
world
.Primarily,with the agenda of
global
Add an article
the global
show examples
market, every
nation
able
Add a missing verb
is able
show examples
to sell their
food
items in the
world
market in order to increase
GDP
Correct article usage
the GDP
show examples
of their own country.
Also
, they can get more products
ownself
Correct pronoun usage
themselves
show examples
and buy more items
on
Change preposition
at
show examples
cheep
Correct your spelling
cheap
show examples
price
Fix the agreement mistake
prices
show examples
due to
variety
Correct article usage
the variety
show examples
of
food
.
Furthermore
,with help of exports and
import
Fix the agreement mistake
imports
show examples
, countries were able to make peace and greater built
long term
Add a hyphen
long-term
show examples
relation.
As a result
,
this
notion
have
Change the verb form
has
show examples
many positive impacts on nations.
On the other hand
,there are some aspects that determine,the drawbacks of transporting of
variety
of
food
. To
greater
Correct article usage
a greater
show examples
extent reason is that country get dependent on one
nation
if they are single
crop
Fix the agreement mistake
crops
show examples
grown in the
worl
Correct your spelling
world
.
For instance
, research revealed that in 18 century, china is
only
Add an article
the only
show examples
nation
that grow tea
crop
Fix the agreement mistake
crops
show examples
in
world
Add an article
the world
show examples
, which sell the product in
over all
Correct your spelling
overall
show examples
nation
.later they rise
their
Change the word
the
show examples
price of
food
and other countries
have
Wrong verb form
had
show examples
too
Replace the word
to
show examples
buy
that items
Change the determiner
that item
those items
show examples
.
Consequently
, it leads to dependence on other countries.
To conclude
, it is clear from the above discussion that
although
there are abundant of advantages of
variety
Add an article
a variety
show examples
of
food
that transport in
the
Remove the article
apply
show examples
all
world
but
Remove the conjunction
apply
show examples
but
Remove the redundancy
apply
show examples
it
also
have
Change the verb form
has
show examples
some drawbacks that
didnot
Correct your spelling
did not
didn't
deniable from
world
Submitted by bhullarsimran2121 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Ultimate Speaking practice for IELTS

Practice speaking step by step, answer real-life questions, and build your confidence. Start your free trial and improve your speaking skills today!
Topic Vocabulary:
    What to do next:
    Look at other essays:

    Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

    Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
    Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!