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Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigration?

#immigration #impact #society
Firstly
, we are going to talk about pollution special water. Nowadays we know that a lot of factors are affected that we do not get
this
insure
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 yet.
While
 new generation will find
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the solution
a solution
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solution
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solutions
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of
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 pollution so we already acquire new technology with renewable energy I think that solar power, wind power and wave power. These technologies do not
the
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 most effective rules but we are working with renewable. ,
However
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 during the production of solar panels are gotten toxic wastes
that
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is
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 why we need a lot of time to improve these technologies.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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