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The bar chart below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different school in four country in 2001.

The bar chart below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different school in four country in 2001.
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Given a bar chart illustrating how much time every tutor spent teaching in various schools in four myriad countries throughout the world in 2001.
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 the USA had the highest figures in each section, Japan had the most similar numbers. A teacher
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 an upper secondary degree worked the most in comparison with others. In the USA, the hours consisted of nearly 1200 working about 20% more than in Spain and Iceland, both of whom had roughly the same figures and ranked second with over 900 units. The hours of a teacher at the primary level are composed
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 amounts in each country except Iceland where the figure is just under that of others (around 650).
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, a lower secondary tutor's time varied greatly. Whilst in Japan and Icelan it is alike constituting approximately 600, those of the USA and Spain substantially more.
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, an American one spent
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 on his work considerably more rather than a Spanish one.
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