( Humaira )The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
This
graph provides data from three countries regarding individuals aged 65 years old and older between 1940 and 2040.
The Y-axis shows the percentage whereas
the X-axis shows six different years.
To begin
with, I would like to focus your attention on two important points.
The first one is Japan, it started with the lowest percentage, 5% in 1940. However
, it ends up with the highest percentage, about 27% in 2040. The second point is the USA which started with the highest proportion just below 10% and subsequently
managed to be the lowest of all three countries in 2040 with a proportion between 20% and 25%.
Furthermore
, an overall
analysis of this
graph shows that all three countries, Japan, USA and Sweden have an increased proportion throughout the years, as all of them have started between 5% and 10% in 1940 and reached over 20% in 2040. Therefore
, this
provides evidence that life expectancy has improved.Submitted by m-not21 on
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