In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phnomenon.

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In today's era, people are living longer time. In fact, we can notice that there are more old people than in the past.

This

due to

several reasons for that

such

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medical

facility

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, food and education. First of all, There are

numers

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numbers

numerous

number

of changes in the

health care

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system. It plays

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crucial for improving our life.

for example

, due

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the development of many

advance

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medical instruments

such

as X-ray machines, sonography machines,

MRI

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machines.

Moreover

, Health related problems can be solved

immedicately

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immediately

by medicine.

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, more

advance

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technology

hepls

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helps

us in the everyday life.

Thus

There

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are many available

solution

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for all the

disease

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Secondly

educations

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are

incriasing

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increasing

, day by day. In recent

time

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, many

countires'

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countries

governments provide free education. So

that

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illiteracy rate has declined. one of these benefits has

shown

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in the declining mortality rate of children. To

illustate

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illustrate

due to

education, many women are aware of the process of

process of

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delivering a baby. they know about

the

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what kind of nutrition

help

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their

children'ss

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children's

developing

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growth.

As a result

, the children's mortality rate has declined as compared to the past .

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, people are aware

for

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their lifestyle.

To sum up

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strogly

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strongly

believe that improvement in the medical sector and the use of

thechonology

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technology

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In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phnomenon.

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