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Culture around the world has become more similar to the other countries then it was before. State reasons, example and conclude if it is a positive or negative trend?

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The above bar chart illustrates the
predected
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predicted
sales
 of jeans for the next year in turkey
in
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per thousand pairs.
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,
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 the bar chart shows the market share of 2 brands
Mango
 Co and Jack and others. It can be clearly observed most of the time the
sales
 of jack and
jones
 was most of
time
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 higher than the
sales
 of
Mango
 except in the month of
july
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 and august.At starting month in
jan
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sales
is
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 approx 450 for Jack and
jones
 and 150 for
Mango
 which is 3 times lesser
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 to jack and
jones
.
Intrestingly
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Interestingly
,we can observe the
sales
 of both
mango
 and jack and
jones
 increase every month and peaked at 500 and 900 respectively. Regarding
to
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product market share 50% of
sales
taken
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 by other companies.
However
,jack and
jones
comprises
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 30% which is 10 % higher than
mango
sale
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 at 20%. It is clearly manifested from the above graphs
due to
 having
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 market share of jack and
jones
 the
sales
was
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 higher.
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