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Culture around the world has become more similar to the other countries then it was before. State reasons, example and conclude if it is a positive or negative trend?

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The above bar chart illustrates the
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 of jeans for the next year in turkey
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per thousand pairs.
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 the bar chart shows the market share of 2 brands
Mango
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 Co and Jack and others. It can be clearly observed most of the time the
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 of jack and
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 was most of
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 higher than the
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 of
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 except in the month of
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 and august.At starting month in
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sales
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 approx 450 for Jack and
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 and 150 for
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 which is 3 times lesser
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 to jack and
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Interestingly
,we can observe the
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 of both
mango
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 and jack and
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 increase every month and peaked at 500 and 900 respectively. Regarding
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product market share 50% of
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taken
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 by other companies.
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comprises
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 30% which is 10 % higher than
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sale
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 at 20%. It is clearly manifested from the above graphs
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 higher.
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